This gave me diabetes...
On a serious note though, I think there's a few things you could do to improve this. First of all, you're going to need to go a lot deeper into your character. So far your backstory looks like something I'd brainstorm for about 45 minutes to get a rough sketch of what happens. There's so many blanks you're going to have to fill in, I could write en essay to tell you about all of them. I apologize if this seems hostile, but it's not intended to be hostile in the least.
Secondly, you don't quite explain how your character really came to be.. Basically all you said was, "He's born, he's hated, he went to Surna." That would be the TL:DR of this, where some peoples TL:DR is about the size of this entire page. I think that you should think of your backstory as more of a biography than anything. Some biographies are books long, others are a bit shorter. My rec would be to go check out some other pages and take a look on how they go about making their pages. Some are really detailed, take Krug's page for example. I really enjoyed reading it because A. It's a good read because all the pieces fit together. B. There's enough detail to answer 90% of the questions I'm asking about her character. For this it doesn't really explain how he came to meet the guy that sold him the sword, how he came to arrive in Surna, and what exactly happened to drive him here. He could've gone anywhere if he wanted to accomplish his goals, but why come to a small town like Surna rather than somewhere like New Imperia or somewhere in the East-marches? Again, this is meant for constructive criticism. not just playing 'bash this kid's page' here as a sick joke. I hope you take the time to read this and follow my suggestions, the character has the potential, we just need to see it drawn out a little more.
